With all of the new technology coming out every day it is hard to know whether or not we are going to completely lose face-to-face communication. It will probably never come to something that severe, but we need to make certain it does not have a fighting chance. Technology is a great thing; communicating one on one, however, provides us with the ability to see one’s facial expression. Something you don’t get when sending an email.
Every day in the first sentence can be removed because it is just being repetitive.
There needs to be a comma right after coming out in the first sentence.
Make the last sentence an add on and but a comma in front of it instead of a period.
Change don't to do not.
There needs to be dashes between one-on-one.
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